Aet Lindling

Alright, this is not something I would read. Not enough paragraphs, and it's obvious you didn't even care enough about it to read it through and fix mistakes. Obviously you ...

Name: Gratian Gender: Male Age: 10 Ancestor(s): Robin Hood Home: Anywhere he can find it. Was recently taken in by an orphanage, which sent him here. Alliance: Neutral Appearance: Wears ...

In many cases, absolutely. Unfortunately, it also has a fairly high chance of causing trauma and so obviously should be avoided.

Polygamy is "right", although a more accurate expression would be to say that I'm neutral on the subject, as I am on being homosexual, black, and so on. Who does ...

It's "pawned" in, *cough* chatspeak. A handful of chatspeak abbreviations slip by the YWS radar, and that's one of them. Irish has the definition. :) It's "owned". Owned is a ...

Your imagery is the best feature of this poem, though that's not to say that the other parts aren't excellent as well. A way you could make your poetry better, ...

This whole poem operates under the conclusion that you will still care when you're an adult. Since you won't, and it's a delusion, the thing falls apart. This is the ...

This has a solid beginning, middle, and end. You use clever wording. It's probably because I'm tired and you've already edited it from others' suggestions (which gives you bonus points ...

The repetition at the beginning is good, actually, it leads up to something nicely, but only when it's leading up to something. Like people before me have said, this poem ...

This would be much better if you didn't force rhymes. Seems like a sweet poem and all, but it's all so awfully stilted and odd because you've tried to force ...

Aet Lindling Because you're awesome. Aet Lindling You too. Aet Lindling Pretty much the best person on YWS. Aside from- Aet Lindling -you. AquaMarine You're the fastest and most awesome ...

This is touching, written from real-life I'm guessing. Like others have said, the flow is a little jolted in places, but other than that the composition is pretty great. One ...

It becomes rather generic around the middle, which is a disappointment as it has the potential to become a light-hearted Dickinson-style word romp about the darkness inside mankind. It is ...

I hate everything you do I hate everything you say And from first sight you knew That every day You'd watch my every movement You'd watch whatever I did And ...

This has a progression of plot throughout the poem, which is rare among much of the poems in Dramatic Poetry. Starts out emo and ends optimistic. Congrats. Despite this, it ...